While it may seem like revision is a quick final step in the writing process, it can and should be given significant time in longer writing projects. Any piece of writing can be improved, and as clear and well-formed as a first draft might seem, it’s always a good idea to give yourself the time to re-read and reflect on ways you might improve your work. Revising is a way to use your agency as a writer to consider the feedback you’ve received and make deliberate decisions on what changes to make. This assignment is designed to give you an opportunity to do just that.

A revision plan is sometimes just a list of ways you can help your draft achieve its goals and articulate larger ideas, or can include strategies that require rewriting part or all of your draft. Revision plans don’t follow an established format, but below you will find prompts that you can use when you write your own plan for revision, which should run approximately 500 words.

ASSIGNMENT

1. Peer Feedback: Summarize the feedback you’vereceived so far, including informal and in-class feedback,paying special attention to areas upon which reviewers agreed or disagreed. Which specific pieces of feedback do you want to address in the final draft?

2. Main Points: What are the major ideas you’re trying to communicate about this community and the ways they write? What are the most important details to know about this community and how it uses the writing concepts?

3. Introduction: Where, specifically, are you introducing those major ideas in the rough draft and could you introduce them earlier? If it’s not clear where those ideas are first mentioned, consider stating them more directly in your revision, possibly in the opening paragraph. Is the purpose of your draft clear in the introduction?

4. Organization: How does each paragraph or section connect to the main ideas or points you want to make about this community and the ways they write? If some paragraphs seem disconnected from the main points, consider cutting them or making a stronger connection to your major ideas.

5. Use of Quotes/Evidence: Looking over the examples of writing from this community, what can you interpret for an audience for your essay? How can you illustrate the points you are making with specific details and examples you can analyze? Where might additional examples from your community, whether you quoted or paraphrased, help demonstrate those ideas even better? Consider reviewing examples you didn’t include — what would help you provide even more detail to explain your ideas best?

6. Unanswered Questions: What’s one question you could answer about this community in the final draft that you don’t answer in the rough draft?

7. Planned Revisions: Based on your responses to the preceding questions: what are three ways you might reinforce, develop, or alter the main points of this essay for the next draft? For example, if one of your peers said you need more evidence, explain how you plan to incorporate evidence more effectively: Will you add more direct quotes? Will you change the way you’ve incorporated the quotes you already have? Will you paraphrase your sources more, and thus add more in-text citations? Or will you do something else entirely? What are three ways you will enhance this draft?
summary: Nawaf Alduhaim analyzed the rules, characteristics, members, location, and writing styles of his small game hunting community. He also highlighted its and role in the greater context, benefits, genres used in communication, the audiences, and the rhetorical and writing situations.
Strengths: As for strengths, it is well organized and covers all the questions almost fully. The well covered or most interesting sections are the characteristics as well as members as I felt I knew everything about this community. The role of this small community on the greater context is unexpectedly convincing. There are a variety of sentence structures with very few grammar mistakes such as using the future tense instead of the present simple in the rhetorical situation. The introduction and the conclusion are comprehensive. Supporting the paper with references enhances its quality.

Q and S : 1- To start with, there is a lot of repetition whether on the level of ideas, or vocabulary. Cutting down on unnecessary words such as “experience and expertise”, “good competition, healthy competition” ,” mechanics , tactics and methods” and others can improve it. The same applies to ideas which are somehow repeated.
2- Moreover, the sections that are not covered well include the writing communication parts which mostly focuses on videos which teach players how to play well. The rhetorical situation was good, yet it needed more clarification along with the purpose and genres.

3- Project 2 is mainly based on applying the components of writing to a real life community. However, the part related to writing practice does not exceed one page, so it is recommended to add some real comments or communications to give a clear view of the genre of writing as well as the rhetorical situation.

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